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Hello my unfortunate protagonists~  It's been awhile since I last wrote and as you can see, I've decided to make a few changes to how I write. But, like Cecil Baldwin said once," Enough to the preamble, onto the amble."

Amarok, or sometimes called Amaroq, is a gigantic gray wolf from Inuit mythology. This beast will hunt its prey alone and is said to devour anyone who is foolish enough to walk through or hunt in the woods alone. Is thought to live in a region of Canada. The Amarok is thought to be either one wolf, with the Greenlandic Inuits, or more than one, with the Artic people. While the Amarok is sometimes thought to be the antagonist of Inuit mythology, there are myths where this gigantic wolf helps people. One of these myths tells about a boy who asked the lord of strength to make him stronger. An Amarok appears and tells the boy that if he wrestles him he'll grow stronger. A few days later, the boy becomes strong enough to overcome bears , thus gaining the esteem of the villagers. A very strong creature, one should not approach them carelessly and should not go into the woods alone. Even though the Amarok can be thought of as a protagonists, you are still prey in it's eyes.

Until next time my unfortunate protagonists~
  • Listening to: The sounds of heavy breathing
  • Reading: fate
  • Watching: The trees for any sign of a attack
  • Playing: Hide and seek with the wolf, hope they don't find
  • Eating: Sparingly
  • Drinking: A few sips of water
"This was a stupid idea." Your son mumured ,as they warily scan the surrounding forest. You sigh;you remember a time when they were up for anything, nowadays you're lucky enough to get them away from their computer screen or their PlayStation. You had to pry him off of his play station so that way he would take a 30 minute walk with you."Let's just go home before the sun goes down", your son said abruptly, shattering your train of thought. A valid point. You turn towards the sun and see that it is starting to sink. You wager that you still have twenty more minutes left before you and your son have to turn around and head for home."Ok," you announce, as you turned towards your son's hopeful face, " we still have a few minutes before we have to head back so let's keep going." You watch as your son's hopeful expression melted off his face and was replaced by a withering scowl. "WE HAVE BEEN IN THESE WOODS ALL DAY," he screamed in rage. You start to chide your son, telling him that he is disturbing the wildlife and that he is over exaggerating. However, at this point of time, he does not care. "THAT DOES IT, IM WALKING BACK TO THE CAR. I HOPE YOU ENJOY 'NATURE' BECAUSE I AM DRIVING HOME WITHOUT YOU." He yelled, his face red with rage. "Son, you have no right to...",but before you can get your last words out, he is gone. You let out a deep sigh. You had been hoping for some quality with your son, he would be in college in a couple of months and you had just wanted to talk about what he was planning to do after college. You continue to follow your son , only catching glimpses of his hiking boots as they would turn corners or cut through the the trees. You stop to catch your breath, when you hear something swiftly pass by you. You spin towards the forest to look , but all you see are a few of the top branches of the trees near you mysteriously broken and the leaves of the trees scattered around the forest floor. This should not frighten you, after all branches break all the time, but you feel as if something is off. You have a feeling that you know exactly what it is, but you just can not figure it out at the moment. Than it dawns on you, the only sounds that you can hear are your sons footprints slowly fading as they got further and further away, the sounds of you heavily breathing out of fear and physical strain, and your heartbeat beating faster. You stand in place and stare out towards the woods, trying to see what beast could frighten the wildlife so quickly. You are abruptly pulled out of your trance by a hair-raising scream up the path. You start to run as fast as you can, hoping against all logic that the person screaming is not your son and that its someone else or a deer. You race around the bend, only to have your hopes crushed. On the pathway, only a few paces from where you were, there lies your son, or what was left of him. The face , that once was your son's face, was now partially crushed. Bits of brain matter and and strains of his hair was littered across the pathway. His left arm was bent at an angle that no arm should ever be bent and his right arm was laid next to him, as if in acceptance of his fate. There was a huge bite in his stomach, most of the flesh underneath the right ribs was gone. You put your over your mouth to prevent yourself from either screaming in terror or from puking at the sight of your son's mutilated corpse."CRUNCH""CRUNCH" "CRUNCH". Startled, you look up from the corpse to see what had disturbed the silence that had fallen over the area. What you see makes you fall to your knees in both despair, surrender, and surprise. The thing that attacked your son ,and was currently eating his left leg,was a wolf, but not just any wolf. This wolf was tall and big enough to make Clifford the dog look like chihuahua. It's fur was a sooty gray color and its face was the most surprising aspect of the colossal beast. It's jaw seemed squarish, the fur around its mouth was permantly died blood red, and it's red eyes shone with ancient,but cruel intelligence. You notice that the mister has finally swallowed what was left of your son and now was looking at you with interest.For awhile, nothing happens. You continue to stare at the wolf until,finally ,you manage to ask in a silent,but broken voice," w-why?" "Because", the wolf replied in a gravelly, ancient, voice," he disturbed my slumber. He had to suffer the consequences." You stare up at the wolf, shocked that he was able to speak." You will also have to pay for awakening me." The wolf continued. As he started to approach you, you look up at him and ask one final question, " What are you?" He looked at you and then howled," I am Amarok, the lord of the woods and your kind have desecrated my sacred forest." And with that he lowers his head towards you and slowly, with an air of leisure, opens his jaws. The last thing you see is a bubblegum pink tongue and a row of razor sharp, blood drenched teeth.
  • Listening to: House of Wolves
  • Reading: fate
  • Watching: A large wolf walk away from the trail
  • Playing: The game of life
  • Eating: Not after that
  • Drinking: Nothing

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Dear Family,
         I can't take this anymore, I am sorry that I have been nothing ,but a disappointment for so long. I can't keep lieing, saying everything will be ok and hide behind a smile that is even more fake than my statement. I can't bear seeing you guys try treating me the same while trying to figure out if my problems are somehow you're fault.There's so much I want to tell you guys. I want to tell how I really feel, why I'm always apologizing for everything I do and how I always seem on the brink of tears. But I'm worried that if I tell you guys, you'll just end up treating me as a freak and you guys will say something along the lines of " Don't be so down on yourself. You shouldn't be unhappy." And I know I shouldn't be ,but this latest fuck up is the last straw. I know I am nothing, but a failure to you, the people who raised
  and have taken care of me for so long. I will no longer be a burden to you, my beloved family, anymore. I have decided to end my life, here and now, to stop encumbering you all. Goodbye, I love you all so much, and I am sorry for everything. My will and testament is under my bed. I love you and don't worry about me, I'll be fine. I am sorry, I'm so sorry. I'm sorry for being a burden, I'm sorry I can't do anything right no matter how hard I try, and I'm sorry that this turned out this way. I'm sorry.

Sincerely,
Reina Muimina

 
19 year old Reina studied the last words she would ever write to her family before slowly walking into the bathroom . She turned to look at her bedroom one last time, trying to imprint every tiny detail of that room into her mind. The room that had held so many memories, kept so many secrets,and sheltered her from harshness of the outside room seemed a little bit emptier. It no longer felt like her room, but a strangers room from a happier time. She sighed, then walked into the bathroom, slowly closing the door behind her , so that way if she had any second thoughts she could always back out. And at first she had many thoughts, many of them saying that she shouldn't give up just yet, that she should just try talking to her loved ones about this. " Even if I tell them, it won't change anything." She spoke softly to herself. "Sure , they would keep an eye on me for awhile, but they would treat me differently and blame themselves. I don't want them to do that." Life for them would never be the same. " Honestly," Reina snorted indignity," They're better off without me. I am nothing ,but a burden to them. I can end this once and for all." Reina stopped in front of the mirror and turned to examine her face one final time. Her reflection showed a eighteen year old girl, tired and beaten down by crushed hopes. There were dark circles underneath her green eyes, her once curly brown hair was now limp from lack of care, and her face was covered with pimples caused by her stress.What ever hopes that she had ,were crushed by this final rejection letter. Duke University was her last chance to get into a decent college, this last refusal was the last straw. It was time to put an end to this. 'Last chance to back out', she thought to herself as she opened the medicine cabinet. She grabbed the Lunesta from the top shelf and then shut the cabinet behind her. She then you turned on the tub and let it fill up with water. Just before she took the pills, she looked towards the bathroom door. 'Maybe, I don't have to do this.' Reina contemplated.'There might still be a chance for me..' "No, I can no longer burden them". Reina said out loud to herself. "Hopefully I won't screw this up as well." After she took the pills, Reina hopped into the tub and waited until the warm water and the effects of the sleeping pill lulled her to sleep. "So this is the end." Reina whispered. "Goodbye Mom, goodbye Dad." Reina whispered as her eyes started to close, " I love you guys." 
Shinigami Hunter. Part one: The Beginning
Part one of the story I'm writing. Sorry it took so long to finish, I've decided that this origin story will be a three parter. Thank you so much for your patience and I hope I can finish the second part soon. Any constructive criticism is appreciated. I hope you enjoy my unfortunate protagonists~
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An idea for a Creepypasta character,but I need some criticism. 
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Hello my unfortunate protagonists~  It's been awhile since I last wrote and as you can see, I've decided to make a few changes to how I write. But, like Cecil Baldwin said once," Enough to the preamble, onto the amble."

Amarok, or sometimes called Amaroq, is a gigantic gray wolf from Inuit mythology. This beast will hunt its prey alone and is said to devour anyone who is foolish enough to walk through or hunt in the woods alone. Is thought to live in a region of Canada. The Amarok is thought to be either one wolf, with the Greenlandic Inuits, or more than one, with the Artic people. While the Amarok is sometimes thought to be the antagonist of Inuit mythology, there are myths where this gigantic wolf helps people. One of these myths tells about a boy who asked the lord of strength to make him stronger. An Amarok appears and tells the boy that if he wrestles him he'll grow stronger. A few days later, the boy becomes strong enough to overcome bears , thus gaining the esteem of the villagers. A very strong creature, one should not approach them carelessly and should not go into the woods alone. Even though the Amarok can be thought of as a protagonists, you are still prey in it's eyes.

Until next time my unfortunate protagonists~
  • Listening to: The sounds of heavy breathing
  • Reading: fate
  • Watching: The trees for any sign of a attack
  • Playing: Hide and seek with the wolf, hope they don't find
  • Eating: Sparingly
  • Drinking: A few sips of water

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I started to want to write one day. And once I started words kept appearing on my skin, like tattoos , but these move around and change. I've always been more of a reader , so I'm not sure if this is a new development.
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Link is finally done saving Zelda once again
He returns home to see everyone cheering.
Zelda and Link start dating
The very next day, Link comes out with a grin.  A man walks up to him
" Hello master link! Now that you have saved Princess Zelda, What are you going to do? "
Link only grins and says. " I'm going off to work my ass off to save her again and keep her for a few hours! "
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A John Johnson and his wife ,from Wisconsin, were going to Florida for a few days. Sadly , the wife had to get on a different flight from her husband so she would arrive in Florida the next day. There were computers in the hotel room, so the husband decided to email her. However, he sent it to the wrong email.

Mary Johnson, from New York, was the wife of a preacher. The preacher, recently, had died and she had just got back from his funeral when she looked at her email. She took one look at the email and promptly fainted. After her daughter revived, she showed her the email. The email red as such:

My beloved wife. I have arrived safely and the trip was uneventful. They now have computers where I am, so we can now contact our loved ones. The arrangement for you have already been made and I can't wait to see you tomorrow.

From your beloved husband.

P.S. Its damn hot down here.
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i dun get it
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I'll give you a hint Fired Up 
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Thank you for the favorites, seeing them was a lovely way to end my day :)
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That's good
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